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Chapter 3 : I'm Hungry...

"Lucy," Natsu gently said with a warm smile. He looked up at Lucy, and they locked eyes. He touched her face gently, And put her hair behind her ear. Lucy was blushing like crazy. She had never seen this side of Natsu before. It made her feel safe and warm.

"I, wanna eat something. Do you have anything to eat? I'm Starving..." Natsu explained.

Lucy sat there, shocked and all.

"Lucy?" Wondered Natsu.

"Oh, It makes sense. You were only joking..." Lucy whispered. Natsu could see Tears streaming down her face.

"Lucy? Why are you crying? Did I do something?" Natsu started to Panic. "Well, Um, I didn't mean what i said, well i really am hungry but-"

"I just thought you were serious. I was wrong." Lucy said with a smile. She still tried to smile with tears streaming her face.

While Natsu panic for a couple of minutes after Lucy explained, He finally realized what he had done.

"Lucy." Natsu said gently. He hugged Lucy tight. tighter than the last hug. "Don't you understand? I don't love any other girl. I don't love Lisanna either. I love you, Lucy. You're the only girl i want to be with. I want you to be happy. Not sad."

Lucy looked up at Natsu, "Are you serious? Well, You're probably just joking with me. Very Funny Natsu. You can't trick me this time. "

"LUCY!" Natsu yelled huffing and puffing.

Lucy was scared to hear Natsu yell with the tone in his voice.

"Lucy, I love you. Okay. Trust me I do." Natsu said gently. "you're the only one i want to love."

"thank you. I love you too, Natsu" Lucy Replied.

They locked eyes and They got closer. Natsu leaned in, And kissed Lucy. Lucy was shocked, but she liked it.

TO BE CONTINUED?

Shortest chapter I've ever done.....

FAIRY TAIL DOES NOT BELONG TO ME, AND YA. :D
Um 3rd chapter?

really short though...
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yangmonster Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
... I am gonna follow you if I can figure this out
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Orihime98 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
(sigh) Nalu. Is there another chapter
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Emperor-Alkarik Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You are welcome. I am more of a recent fan, actually. I am anxiously awaiting the next Fairy Tail season dubbed. I also like the pairing: it is neither made incredibly obvious at every turn nor completely ignored.

Anyway, I enjoy the fic, my only criticism is the pacing (and I guess indirectly the length) but it does not detract from entertaining me!
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Pencil-Doodles Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
As long as you're a fan! Ahhhh, you watch dub. i watch the original in Japanese. i also watch the subs too, to compare. yes, I just love this couple, Nalu Forever.

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy it. Yes, i know, The pacing is really fast! I just didnt know what to write to make the pacing slower, so i just made it fast.
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Emperor-Alkarik Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I watch both. I appreciate both voice casts, although I openly prefer dub over sub.

Perhaps you can expand on the subtle gestures the characters do and the characters feelings as they interact? Being nervous and/or uncomfortable usually means being more aware so perhaps they take note of even the tiniest things the other does and what it may mean or how they should react to it.

Play with it, I really want to see more!
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Emperor-Alkarik Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
The pacing was really quick to the love confession but I like it. Keep it going, I would like to see how it progresses. You also capture the characters wonderfully, I can imagine their voices in my head as I read this and the dialogue feels so natural.
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Pencil-Doodles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
D'aww thanks so much!
Yes, i understand that this was really fast paced, since i didn't have an idea of having the pace slower, so i just wrote it like this.

Thank you! Fairy tail fans? :D
I appreciate your feedback towards this piece, and i will try to continue.
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